Passenger 66: A Psychologically Thrilling Short Story With a Seat Grabbing Twist

The story had a few grammatical errors but the plot was interesting. It did grasp my attention. Nice read.

I'm all for giving constructive criticism, but no one is perfect at first. With that being said, in my opinion, I loved it, as is!. I can fit the pieces of detail into my head so I could paint my own picture of the story with ease. The short story was grasping in the beginning and made me feel I needed to read more throughout, to keep the painting going. Attention to detail is great, I would personally add more, but overall it was a great read!! I would recommend this to anyone who loves to read! (edit) and your Q&A has some helpful and site full things might I add; personal but not too attention seeking for "self" recognition, yet humble enough to realize this is a gift, a talent that can come and go "with no skills added". BUT WHAT HAPPENED TO THE TEXT GRANDMA SENT?! DID SHE SEE IT?! DID SHE TRY TO TEXT BACK?! WHAT ABOUT MADDIE, WHO WAS SHE THINKING ABOUT?! I'm so ready for more short stories from you, Queen! keep on keeping on!!

Sorry---but this was a TOTAL waste of my time. Not only was the story implausible the writing was terrible! I would like a refund!

Interesting story, not bad writing but there are some grammatical errors, just a few. I would have liked to see the writer flush this story out a bit more. I rarely say this, but it could have been longer with more detail and backstory. Still, a good fast read, definitely worth reading.

There are a lot of editing errors in this story which just put me off altogether. For example paragraph 4 is missing speech marks for Miss Lillian dialogue. Later on the captain tells the passengers to "retain" that guy. "restrain" is the word needed here. And since when has "drug" been a word for dragging someone? There's some very stilted dialogue from the captain. And the timing (spoiler alert) of the crash seems very drawn out. The plane is crashing and the doctor is both telling the young girl to think of those she loves AND trying to get medication into the deranged passenger...I mean...why? Surely there's no time for medication to kick in or for his long explanation of ECT! Ummm, also after the crash there are lots of injured "pedestians", don't you mean "passengers"?. I'm not sure of the writer's knowledge of flying either. No passenger can get into a commercial cockpit...the doors are locked. Also does this sound right? I quote.."The gears that moved the plane forward were switched from automatic to manual once the auto pilot was knocked out of its transmission." Hmmmmm? Even the second paragraph is grammatically unsound..."Maneuvering through all the other pedestrians who had to go through check-in and security and find their departing gates." OK, there's something terribly wrong with that sentence. It does not make sense. It's a muddled story with potential. A good edit, tightening up of grammar and spelling, and this could be a good story. Sorry but it didn't work for me.

The idea of the story is okay but I feel like the author used a thesaurus for way too many words. Big words aren't necessary to write a good story.

I highly recommend Passenger 66 to anyone who loves a great quick read with interesting twists. I gave it a 5-srar rating because it is well written a great for children and adults alike!

Childish writing and terrible plot - no character development

found it hard to put down